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One poem for a lonely girl
Who thought she could rule her closed off world
She wished upon a moment of the day
She carved a companion in a block of clay

The clay carving came to life
Asked the girl to become his wife
Her universe exploded and colours spilled in
She looked so happy with a silly grin

One word for a lovely girl
Whose life grew from a little pearl
Her world is filled with colour and light
With a person to hold her for the rest of her nights
Not as saddening as the title describes it. If you're disappointed, my apologies. Anyways, enjoy! (by the way.... is it who's or whose?! Last stanza, second line)
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NightOwlDreamer Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
cute! :)
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ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you =D
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NightOwlDreamer Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013
:la: no problem!
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Dreamworld88 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
I like this poem. Like your description says, I was expecting something sadder. I was pleasantly surprised.
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ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Student Writer
That's good, I'm glad =D
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TheDarknessKitten Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so cute :D
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ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
Love your icon by the way =D
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TheDarknessKitten Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :3
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THEDORKYWEIRDO Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this! really cute and ugh, it rhymes, fabulous. 
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ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
Frustrated with the rhyme scheme?
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THEDORKYWEIRDO Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
no,no, quite the opposite xD
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:iconcoldamuchan:
ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Student Writer
Ahaha thats good ^_^
I'm glad you enjoyed it
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Nice poem :-)
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:iconcoldamuchan:
ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks =D
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IndigoBloom1 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's spelt "Whose", you had it right ^-^. Very clever and sweet poem btw :)
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ColdAmuChan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
Whew, thank goodness! Thank you for clearing that up for me ^_^
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IndigoBloom1 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hmhmhm, your welcome ^_^
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