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Death Bed

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Time is flowing out of my being
as I laid on this cold floor
I wonder if my life had meaning
before God knocked on my door

I fell upward, toward to sky
Looked down at my face
wondering why
before going to Gods place

All the friends I have left
All the family who shed tears
All the people I have met
All the years I have cleared

I cannot go back
My time is done
Going up a track
To where I begun

Goodbye my friends and fellow human
Mind I ask, what on earth are you doing?
Written for my friend who just passed away. You were awesome man and will be missed. This is my goodbye to you.
© 2012 - 2024 ColdAmuChan
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MonicaArlene's avatar
It's very nice. I do think the 'wondering why' in the second stanza seems a bit out of place. Perhaps you could lengthen that by a few syllables. And in the second to last stanza, "where I've begun" sounds a bit more appropriate. Overall a very nice, heartfelt piece.